Critique Services

I know that if you’re an aspiring author, it’s easy to get discouraged or confused on what you need to do to get a literary agent. I know that feeling all too well, which is why I’ve decided to offer Query Critique Services for aspiring authors like yourself!

First of what, WHAT is a Query letter and why do I need one?

A query letter is a letter explaining to literary agents what your book is about before they dive into reading your sample chapters. Since this will likely be the first introduction of your story to agents, and some agents don’t even request sample chapters unless they are intrigued by your query letter, it is a very crucial part of the process.

How can you help me polish my query letter?

I will read over your query letter and provide two edits. I will help you craft a query letter that draws agents in, and help you find the right agents to query for your story.

Why should you help me?

I’ve officially started my journey to becoming a published author in 2014. When I finished writing my first manuscript, I was overeager and didn’t polish it enough before sending it to literary agents. However, many agents requested partial and even full requests off of the strength of my query letters. I signed with my literary agent in 2016. My debut novel, THE FORGOTTEN GIRL, releases on November 5, 2019.

Will this service guarantee that I’ll sign with a literary agent?

Unfortunately no. Sometimes, great writers aren’t able to sign with literary agents right away, and great novels don’t sell right away. It can be matter of timing, the trends of the market, the agent you want already has a similar manuscript in their roster, or something else entirely. However, the query letter is one step of many. With a polished manuscript, synopsis, and query letter, you have the tools to pitch your novels to literary agents who may be interested in your work. Although everything else is out of your hands, you can control these things.

How do I sign up?!

Send me an email at IndiaHillWrites at gmail dot com with the subject header as: CRITIQUE SERVICES, so we can discuss my rate. I am only opening up ten slots at a time so ensure that I am giving every query letter the attention it needs.

*To be clear, paying for critique/editing services is not crucial in your journey to publication. It can be done on your own, for free. However, if you are interested in having someone else have eyes on your work and offer valuable critiques and insights on your query letter, I am more than happy to do that for you!

**On that same note, if a literary agent asks for money to look at your manuscript or sign you, RUN. Your literary agent should not see money from you until you sell your book.


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